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发表于 2009-5-20 22:04:14
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本人英文水平也有限，作了一些修改，从用词的准确性及语法的角度，仅供参考：
Michael Jackson，is known as the king of pop. He is the most influential musician after Elvis Presley in the western and his achievement is definitely beyond Elvis.
His first performance was when he was 5,and he became famous when he was 8.His first album was puplished when he was 10.He became the youngest champion singer of American when he was 12 .When he was 25,he broke all the sell-records and win-a-prize records of music.He was called "the king of pop"when he was 30 years old.
Michael's every movement was reported as the headline by press.There are a lot of a lot of bad news about him.I don't care what people are thinking,I believe him,I have faith in him.I don't think a person who cares about the children,the environment,the society and the world peace would do that. From his songs,we can understand that his heart is full of trueness and goodness and love，it's not false.
He has not performed for more than 10 years,but this year he is BACK ,to his countless fans,it's more like a party.
Don't tell me you don't know that big news.The tickets were sold out in several hours.I'm so happy to see this, but to some people who say he is "the past progressive",this news is slaping themselves in the face.
Because it proved Michael's influence is still invincible!
THE KING IS BACK! |
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